From start to finish this is a great story! Loved the father/son moments. Very well written! Great job.

Loved the story. Your writing style captures the characters and lets them flow into this story line flawlessly. I will definitely be reading more from you.

An amazing, compelling story, with plenty of emotion and angst and h/c, of course. Very enjoyable, a great weekend read!

Pat, I realized a while back I never left you a comment about this story, and since I was a faithful reader, I thought I should. I am really glad you were able to get back into your account and finish the story first of all. I really like the way you ended it. Though personally I think you should have nailed Vance's ass to the wall. But I can understand why you didn't, for the kids. It was really thoughtful of Tony to think of Vance's kids growing up without a father. Let me know when you write more. I would love to read them. Jackie

Wow! I started to read your story yesterday... and finished it right now.. I'm at a loss for words there... (and that rarely happens) ... You've got an amazing writing style and while I read your story I talked to a friend and was like "I so can see this scene right in front of me" and like "wow you know.. that's SO gibbs / tony / abby / ..." Okay, I guess what I'm trying to say is: Wonderful job and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Hi, I am glad to finally have another chapter. I was like a woman in the desert, looking for water and finding none. Also, I just wanted you to know. I have submitted my first story to this site, Accoutable. Thought I wrote fan fiction regularly for the X-files. Anyway, let me know what you think. GREAT chapter! Keep em comin'! Jackie

Man, what a twisted plot. I LOVE IT. Keep up the good work

Another great chapter. I can't get enough. Come back soon.

What a great story. One of the best I've read. Love a good hurt/comfort story. And what an evil director Vance you've got. Well done. Can't wait for the next chapter.

great story. losts of intrigue, character insight and plotting. Can't wait for the next chapter.

i read this entire story in one marathon session and it was brilliant! Thanks so much.

errrr that would be end not ned.

Both sad and happy to get to the ned of this story. Sorry you had computer issues but happy to see so much good stuff to read.

This is so well thought out/ It continually holds your interest and leaves you wanting more.

OHHHHHHHHHHHH goody...more..more..moreeeeeeeee

Oh THANK Goodness. Sorry you had troubles but I am so glad to see another chapter. Excellent as usual. twi

I really love this story. I'm curious how this story will go on. Please update soon!

I loved it right from the start. This story is thrilling. I badly want to know how it will continue, hope I don't have to wait for too long.

I have been thoroughly captured by your story and can't wait for you to continue. As much as has been revealed there is so much more that is still unknown. I was not the least bit surprised that Vance and Tony's father were out to get Tony, but you caught me off guard with the Sec Nav's involvement -- I think I understand Eli David's involvement, but would like to hear it stated. This has been quite a roller coaster ride and I have hung on every bit of information as it has been revealed, but I have to say that it makes no sense at all that Dr. Marshall is on the Sec Nav's payroll as a "hitman". Why would she be in the small town of Stillwater? She would be placed somewhere in DC or the like so she would have access to more people that the Sec Nav would be associated with and might want eliminated. Even Gibbs did not know that Tony would head to Stillwater -- Vance and the Sec Nav were looking for him for days and did not know where he was until Tony called. Sorry, but that little bit makes no sense -- also Gibbs should have known not to leave Tony without protection -- the bad guys know where he is and there is an international contract on his life -- and Abby does not count. The rest is all quite intriguing and I hope you write more soon -- can't wait to find out what will happen next.

Love this so far. I think the father/son dynamic for Gibbs & Tony is very interesting. I don't get how Tony could be doing so much undercover and obviously getting ill without Gibbs noticing anything. I love that you are working all of the team into the story. I think NCIS has one of the best ensemble cast of characters and love to see them all interact -- for good or bad. The Doctor is an interesting addition. She sounds to be just Gibbs' type, but maybe he gets his taste from his father. There also seems to be a bit of interest between Tony and "Kate" too. Did you mention how old she is? Anyway, please write more soon!!!

Please write more soon. I am anxious to see how this unfolds. It is hard to believe that Tony would work undercover again -- especially secretly so I am really curious to see what Vance said or did to convince him to do it and what happened to hurt Tony and shoot-up his vehicle. I find the implied relationship between Tony and Jack to be interesting -- can't wait to see what happens now that Tony is in Stillwater and what Gibbs will do or say when he finds out. Please write more soon --I am very impatient and find it hard to wait for more of a good story.

This is a good start. I think it is cool that Tony made a connection with Gibb's Dad. I can't imagine what would make Tony do another undercover assignment for "The Director", especially behind his team's backs and most especially without telling Gibbs. I can't wait to find out the reason. Please write more soon.

I loved this!

Wow! Fabulous chapter!

This was another WOW chapter! Fabulous job!