update please

merci pour cette suite. vivement la prochaine. Que va t-il se passer une fois Tony détaché.

wahou, c'est grand. Pauvre TOny. Moi à ça place une fois libéré, je me tire une balle dans la tête. Une suite...

I would say you are on track and to keep going.

Very nice start. I love the premiss of Vance and Gibbs as Doms. Your English might be a bit problematical but not at all unreadable. I do agree that getting someone who speaks English to beta might be helpful. I am looking forward to reading more of this story.

Das ist doch mal ein verheißungsvoller Anfang ;) Vielleicht brauchst du ja nur einen Beta Reader, der deine gute Geschichte noch "glatter" macht? This is a nice start, I really love this story can't wait until I read more. Keep up the great work.

do you plan to continue or has this been abandoned?

can we have some more to this plaese thank you it is geting so good

Nice starter, very hot and kinky. Your english is not too bad, just a few errors here and there. You might want to consider getting an english speaker to read over the chapters before you post to catch the little things. Still a great story though, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter